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My past is bleeding,
My present is needing,
Some sort of second chance.

So let's forget,
Erase regret,
Backspace to what I was.

Except this time,
I'll take what's mine,
This magic will be me.

I'll take the good,
All that I could,
All the good from my past.

But discard the bad,
Which made me sad,
That caused who I am now.

I'm leaving myself tonight,
Today,
So let's relive,
And make things right.
4-10-09

Hope you like it, for a contest [link]
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:iconloverz116:
loverz116 Featured By Owner May 2, 2009
My past is bleeding,
My present is needing,
Some sort of second chance.

love that verse.

i really liked this poem.

:heart:
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner May 2, 2009
Yeah this one was pretty simple but people liked it a lot. Thanks :)
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:iconstuff7:
stuff7 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009   Writer
i generally don't like rhyming poetry, but this is really good
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
Haha yeah, really simple comparatively for me, glad you like it.
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:iconstuff7:
stuff7 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009   Writer
:D
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llama212 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
its good
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:iconsocially-suicidal:
Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
:) Yayyy!
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:iconllama212:
llama212 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
:D
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whitetigers06 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
Brilliant!! I love the rhyming used. Really good!!

Congratulations on the comp!!
oxox
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
Mhm, glad you like it, and thanks :)
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:iconwhitetigers06:
whitetigers06 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
You are welcome.
oxox
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EPAmanda123 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009
I really like th ewasy it ryhmes; it makes it sound faintly like a limerick. Cool!
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2009
Grats on first place, Ima go check out your work, I'm sure it's really good :O
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Mirax3163 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Good poem ^^ and good luck in the contest!! :D
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:iconsocially-suicidal:
Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2009
Mhm, thanks... this one got a lot of attention surprisingly :O
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Mirax3163 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2009  Student Digital Artist
you're welcome! :D
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fallenfromgrace17 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2009   Writer
Good luck in the contest! Very great poem!
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:iconsocially-suicidal:
Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2009
Hahaha yepp... we'll see how that goes, thanks :)
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fallenfromgrace17 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2009   Writer
you're welcome!
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DaRk-f0x Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Pretty cool :D although I'd schange some minor things but hey, nothing in the world is perfect, and this is beautiful as it is :D

Very good :)
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2009
Hahaha yeah it was a 5 minute poem that turned out a lot better than expected. Thanks for the read, comment, and fave :D
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DaRk-f0x Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
It's my pleasure :D
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typically-insane Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
So let's forget,
Erase regret,
Backspace to what I was.

those lines hit me,
well done.
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Mhm, these lines just came to me, I'm surprised it turned out so well. Glad you like it :)
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:icontypically-insane:
typically-insane Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
i think thats the only way poetry should come,
when the lines just flow.
epic.
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Ahh yeah... the poetryzone :)
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jesusroxgirl Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
good luck on the contest! :hug:
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Hahah yeah... I thought for some reason today was the 11th. I guess the short-time poem worked out pretty well though :)
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jesusroxgirl Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah, it worked out great ^^
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underworldriver Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully written and so very true.
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Mhm, I'm glad you like it :D
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underworldriver Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:D anytime man.
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OpheliaSophronia Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Poems about starting over are always interesting to me. XD I have no clue why, even when I was 9 I was obsessed with some song that I can't remember the title of that was about starting over. It's an interesting thought, because is it REALLY possible to start over? Eh, anyway, I loved it. XD
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Hrm... that's interesting. Yeah, there's too many memories and the past corrupts too much. We can't be unaffected... it sucks ><
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OpheliaSophronia Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
I know! I wish I could wake up and remember nothing from my past sometimes. XD Wouldn't it be sort of fun? You get to re-get to know people! But then they would have to let go of their past with you, so it'd be better if they forgot of your existence or something. <.> I dunno. XD
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Ahhh yes... so many things out there I want to try again at... hesitating has owned my life a lot.
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OpheliaSophronia Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Really? I'm too rash sometimes. XD I suppose you need a nice balance, eh?
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Yeah, I've found myself hiding way too much, it's awful =P
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OpheliaSophronia Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Aw, I'm sorry. <.> I don't tend to hide from people much, but I get tired of them really quickly.
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
I love everyone... way too much =P
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pyros-dream Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009  Student General Artist
Thankyou so much for entering :hug:

Wow a great piece!! your rhyming patten is a brilliant effect ^^

you could of had more time, if you had needed it ^^

but thsnkyou so much :hug:
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Hahaha naw... I usually get good pieces off quick impulses/whims anywho. Glad you like it :D
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pyros-dream Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009  Student General Artist
well it reads really really nicly ^^!!!
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RoyalBlackheart Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
Best piece of literature I think I've ever read. Outstanding meaning and what a vibrant flow and rhythm. Love it, got a lot of emotion in this little piece.
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Socially-Suicidal Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2009
:O Hrmm that's so interesting... I'll be honest, I saw a poem with the prompt in it about 5-10 minutes ago. I was like "oh god it's due today!" and wrote it down. Glad I could produce something this good in so little time :)
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